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Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? We can know more about a person from the types of friends he/she has.
托福考试时间:2011-11-13,2011-05-28
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As is generally recognized, maintaining friendship with intimate friends is convenient in our life, especially with the ubiquity of social network. Just like the

proverb goes"Like attract like",there is no doubt that we tends to establish friend circle with those who are similar with us. To some extent, our life styles as well

as personalities are inevitably determined by the friends whom we mingle with. Thus, it is a judicious method to know a person through looking at his friends.

First of all, most of us share the identical interest with friends since we are likely to make tight relationship when participating in same activities. Psychologically speaking, it is the frequency we confront with each other leads to the probability of becoming kindred spirits, for the simple reason that we can get familiar with others through sincere talk and satisfactory cooperation. Naturally, common hobbies are prerequisite for friendship. In stark contrast with them, if people don't have overlap of interest, hardly could they form tight link with each other since there is no opportunity to get in touch. Needless to say, friends' hobbies perovide us informations of inclination.


In addition, we can judge people's characteristics by communicating with their friends. As the proverb goes, birds of a feather flock together. When looking for

partners, we are prone to select those who are similar to us so that we can reach a consensus rather than always inducing conflict. There is a vivid instance in my

class. Many friends in our group are amiable and self-effacing, rather than always wearing an arrogant air. Thus, when Ann, a kind and introverted girl, joined in our

discussion, we feel comfortable and fit in well with her. Nevertheless, we show aversion toward Tim who always condescending and buck the rule in school because there

is a difference in personality between us and Tim.

Furthermore, not only will friends share the same interest and characteristic with us, they can also reflect our social status and reputation. Friends enjoy the wealth and kudos that others bring as well as pleasure, which means that people are reluctant to make friends with the lower class. It is hard to imagine that a millionaire would rather to make friends with a poor worker because of the discrepancy of their status. We can also turn to the friend circle of Taylor swift on Twitter, which is constituted by the best singer, composer and models in the world instead of mediocre fans. It is commonsensical that all of them are bellwethers of fashion industry and they have common sense of belonging. Consequently, we can speculate one's wealth and reputation through his friends.

All in all, I think that friends are reflections of us and we can get the whole image of person by observing his friends.
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As is generally recognized(as generally recognized 此处无需be动词), maintaining friendship with intimate friends is convenient(保持友谊不是很方便的 而是很简单的 easy, not difficult都可以) in our life, especially with the ubiquity of social network. Just like the proverb goes"goes应该放置在具体的proverb内容的后面Like attract like",there is no doubt that we tends(we不需要加上第三人称单数 tend to)to establish friend circle with those who are similar with us. To some extent, our life styles as well as personalities are inevitably determined by the friends whom we mingle with. Thus, it is a judicious method to know a person through looking at his friends.(词汇的使用很恰当也很高级 特别好!)

First of all, most of us share the identical interest with friends since we are (more 强调更有可能)likely to make tight relationship when participating in same activities. Psychologically speaking, it is the frequency we confront with each other leads(that leads) to the probability of becoming kindred spirits, for the simple reason that we can get familiar with others through sincere talk and satisfactory cooperation. Naturally, common hobbies are prerequisite(the prerequisites) for friendship. In stark contrast with them, if people don't have overlap of interest, hardly could they form tight link with each other since there is no opportunity to get in touch(with each other at all). Needless to say, friends' hobbies perovide us informations(information是不可数名词 不能加s) of inclination.


In addition, we can judge people's characteristics by communicating with their friends. As the proverb goes, birds of a feather flock together.(注意标点符号 加上引用号) When looking for partners, we are prone to select those who are similar to us so that we can reach a consensus rather than always inducing conflict. There is a vivid instance in my class. Many friends in our group are amiable and self-effacing, rather than always wearing an arrogant air. Thus, when Ann, a kind and introverted girl, joined in our discussion, we feel comfortable and fit in well with her. Nevertheless, we show aversion toward(towards) Tim who always condescending(is always condescending and buck the rule in school because there is a difference in personality between us and Tim. 

Furthermore, not only will friends share the same interest and characteristic with us, they can also reflect our social status and reputation. Friends enjoy the wealth and kudos that others bring as well as pleasure, which means that people are reluctant to make friends with the lower class. It is hard to imagine that a millionaire would rather to(like to, be willing to) make friends with a poor worker because of the discrepancy of their status. We can also turn to the friend circle of Taylor swift on Twitter, which is constituted by the best singer, composer and models in the world instead of mediocre fans. It is commonsensical that all of them are bellwethers of fashion industry and they have common sense of belonging. Consequently, we can speculate one's wealth and reputation through his friends。

这边这个millionaire找朋友的例子举得不是特别有逻辑。并不是说他们可能交lower class的朋友的,毕竟做人也不能那么势利,红火了就忘记曾经同甘共苦的战友们了嘛hh 这里可以强调的是people tend not to make friends who are lower in terms of social class due to the discrepancy between their daily schedules and social habits。强调是因为周遭环境,平时的日程安排etc等等不同,而导致不同class的人不太可能做好朋友。注意托福写作中state an opinion的时候也不能用太extreme的语气,比如此处,也不是一定的case。 


All in all, I think that friends are reflections of us and we can get the whole image of person by observing his friends.

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