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历年试题 2011-10-08NA 独立写作

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作者:Never_ever 保存时间:2016-10-02 人气:209
Question:
Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? The best way to increase students' interest in a subject is to teach them the significance of the subject outside of school.
托福考试时间:2011-10-08,2012-11-10,2014-12-06
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disagree.it's not the best way to arise the students' interest.
supporters:impulse students to learn because of the useful aspect of the suject. 2.intend to teach student how to apply the subject to reality
against:1.only to teach the signifiant aspect of the subject may attract the interest in a short time.but in the long term,it may cause lots of problems,and thus,it may have completely opposite effects.2.if you teach them how to apply to reality,students may well ignore the essential notion.
my opinion:methods are different.teach the history of a subject,let them know the origin of the subject can arise the interest;some subjects,you may let them do some experiments may really help;some sujects you have to help them to oberve the phenomenon in nature.etc.
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同学你好 很高兴给你点评~

首先我觉得你的观点论述的很有条理,举的例子比如说math,chemist和petrology都能很好的说明你想要表达的观点,同时还有petrology一段是提出提升学生兴趣的新的方法,这也让整个文章更有说服力了。我认为你的论述和词汇语法都不错,但是在结构方面可能需要改进一下~ 建议在每段之间空一行,这样结构比较清晰,再就是第一段的开头虽然很新颖,但是是不是太长了~我觉得对于friend的那句话可以缩减一点,这样更能突出你的观点,让整个文章的重点在后面而不是偏前面。

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Never_ever 认为这是一个有帮助的点评
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